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@@ -18,21 +18,22 @@ A single instance of Mistpark Server supports up to several hundred people
 using commodity hosting hardware. Each of these people can connect with any 
 other mistpark/DFRN cell anywhere in the world and share photos, links, 
 status updates, whatever. Also available from Mistpark Labs is 
-Mistpark Personal Edition, which supports a single user.
+Mistpark Personal Edition, which supports a single person.
 
 Mistpark may also be closed off from the global community and used to support
 social networking amongst corporate, educational, religious, and other private
-communities. This makes it an excellent choice for providing a safe social
-networking environment to young teenagers, as opposed to (for instance)
-Facebook.
+communities. This makes it an excellent choice for the social networking needs
+of young teenagers. Their network can grow to global scope as their maturity 
+increases - and can be made available only to their known friends until then.
 
-Every user has unlimited profiles available. There is a "public profile" which 
-can be seen by anybody. Additional profiles may be tailored to specific
-groups or individuals - and shown when a known friend visits your site.
+Every person on Mistpark has unlimited profiles available to them. There is a 
+"public profile" which can be seen by anybody. Additional profiles may be 
+tailored to specific groups or individuals - and shown when a known friend 
+visits your site.
 
 Groups may be setup for closed conversations (like Diaspora's "aspects"). In 
-this way your conversations with drinking buddies may be kept separate from 
-conversations with co-workers (for instance).  
+this way your conversations with drinking buddies may be kept completely 
+separate from conversations with co-workers (for instance).  
 
 Please see http://dfrn.org for more information on the mistpark/DFRN project.